[Seeking Critic] Emoh

Summary:

Home isn't home anymore. It's different. The lost have come back to life, as well as old memories.

[Seeking Critic] Emoh

PenOrSaber1 15 Dec 2022 12:58

Want some critique on my summary. It's under the heading: Summary (Emoh)
Here's the sanbox link: http://timeless-places-sandbox.wikidot.com/penorsaber1-s-sandbox
Note: I hadn't read the article A Blissful Night in the Depths of Your Mind at the time of typing the sandbox article, but even now, after reading it, I still believe there are plenty of differences between my sandbox draft and that article.
I know I'm thinking ahead of myself, but I plan to create a level for this summary, and then an anomaly to explain the dead coming back to life.

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Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to writing for the Backrooms Wiki. Did I get everything? Oh yeah, I left off writing for the Backrooms Wiki ~ Pen.

Last edited on 15 Dec 2022 19:44 by PenOrSaber1 Show more

Emoh Critique - From ZENAJ

Ferrante 16 Dec 2022 19:11

Anyways. I'm gonna start by saying that this story actually feels like a standalone thing that fits Timeless Places, so my props to that. I'll now apply my system.

Fluidity: The story reads very well, it has a consistent pacing and doesn't crack anywhere. I feel like the way the story is written is intentionally "reversed" if that's the right wording for it.

Liminality: eh..I guess? I don't really see it. This story is a great road down nostalgia lane with memories being a heavy play. However I cannot really put liminality in it. As liminality to me is not just pure nostalgia.

Originality: Yes, nothing to say here. This is more or less the type of tales I would expect in Timeless Places. It's, at least the way I interpreted it, intentionally confusing.

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Re: [Seeking Critic] Emoh

PenOrSaber1 17 Dec 2022 14:02

Thank you! To tell you the truth, I don't know what Liminality means, and a dictionary didn't help.
Would you believe me if I told you I the idea randomly popped into my head, I went and wrote it down, typed it up, ran it through Grammarly, then asked for critic?

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Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to writing for the Backrooms Wiki. Did I get everything? Oh yeah, I left off writing for the Backrooms Wiki ~ Pen.

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Re: [Seeking Critic] Emoh

PenOrSaber1 07 Feb 2023 15:46

If anyone decides to provide critique on this, contact me via wikidot pm.Thank you.

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Just a high schooler who thinks he is good at writing. Likes working on a lot of stuff, ranging from writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to writing for the Backrooms Wiki, to writing for the Backrooms Wiki. Did I get everything? Oh yeah, I left off writing for the Backrooms Wiki ~ Pen.